Comments on: what do you think of this book review that I will send today to the local newspaper? Can i make it better? http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/ Sat, 11 Feb 2012 14:09:15 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Reverend Black Grape http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/comment-page-1/#comment-25547 Reverend Black Grape Thu, 21 Jan 2010 21:11:25 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/#comment-25547 You give away too much in paragraph 3. Suggested: For help Darren turns to his neighbor, a doddering self-proclaimed witch, culminating in an adventure involving black magic, a malevolent ghost, and a hidden doll that may hold the key to everything. You give away too much in paragraph 3.

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For help Darren turns to his neighbor, a doddering self-proclaimed witch, culminating in an adventure involving black magic, a malevolent ghost, and a hidden doll that may hold the key to everything.

]]> By: Sami V http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/comment-page-1/#comment-25548 Sami V Thu, 21 Jan 2010 21:11:25 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/#comment-25548 On the whole pretty good but as you say you can always make it better! On the whole pretty good but as you say you can always make it better!

]]> By: wdx2bb http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/comment-page-1/#comment-25549 wdx2bb Thu, 21 Jan 2010 21:11:25 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/3881/what-do-you-think-of-this-book-review-that-i-will-send-today-to-the-local-newspaper-can-i-make-it-better/#comment-25549 Take out the references to "I." Everyone knows you wrote the book. You don't have to say it again. Take out the references to "I." Everyone knows you wrote the book. You don’t have to say it again.

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