poet try some do lie but search the sky so tail me why?

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1. dorian says:

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   this person likes it.
   actually it can be sung as a "poem song" a song without instruments,just the voice,bit a nip tuck there and here.
   Dorian
2. Mary Magdalene says:

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   Honey i do like it. But let me give you my two cents: poetry doesn’t need to rhyme! So don’t force it to rhyme too much until it loses its essence, meaning and impact towards your readers. Keep practicing. Practice makes perfect! =)
3. bob s says:

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   that’s not poetry. it’s rap. the forced rhymes at the end of each line are lousy poetry, but i hear it in rap all the time.
4. kissaled says:

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   how do you like this poem if it is mine and you cant hear it
   I want to know because my ear is to near it
   and disassemble my body I fear it
   and if I can my eye will tear it
   is full of romance
   and understands trance
   and your second glance
   and begs your chance
   but if I need to be more clear
   this is my fear
   so I kept it till the rear

   A few little changes, and long sentence tendency ruins the absurdness of your message.