Comments on: poet try some do lie but search the sky so tail me why? http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/ Sat, 11 Feb 2012 14:09:15 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: dorian http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/comment-page-1/#comment-43611 dorian Fri, 12 Mar 2010 03:03:46 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/#comment-43611 this person likes it. actually it can be sung as a "poem song" a song without instruments,just the voice,bit a nip tuck there and here. Dorian this person likes it.
actually it can be sung as a "poem song" a song without instruments,just the voice,bit a nip tuck there and here.
Dorian

]]> By: Mary Magdalene http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/comment-page-1/#comment-43612 Mary Magdalene Fri, 12 Mar 2010 03:03:46 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/#comment-43612 Honey i do like it. But let me give you my two cents: poetry doesn't need to rhyme! So don't force it to rhyme too much until it loses its essence, meaning and impact towards your readers. Keep practicing. Practice makes perfect! =) Honey i do like it. But let me give you my two cents: poetry doesn’t need to rhyme! So don’t force it to rhyme too much until it loses its essence, meaning and impact towards your readers. Keep practicing. Practice makes perfect! =)

]]> By: bob s http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/comment-page-1/#comment-43613 bob s Fri, 12 Mar 2010 03:03:46 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/#comment-43613 that's not poetry. it's rap. the forced rhymes at the end of each line are lousy poetry, but i hear it in rap all the time. that’s not poetry. it’s rap. the forced rhymes at the end of each line are lousy poetry, but i hear it in rap all the time.

]]> By: kissaled http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/comment-page-1/#comment-43614 kissaled Fri, 12 Mar 2010 03:03:46 +0000 http://howdoigetmyexboyfriendback.org/6378/poet-try-some-do-lie-but-search-the-sky-so-tail-me-why/#comment-43614 how do you like this poem if it is mine and you cant hear it I want to know because my ear is to near it and disassemble my body I fear it and if I can my eye will tear it is full of romance and understands trance and your second glance and begs your chance but if I need to be more clear this is my fear so I kept it till the rear A few little changes, and long sentence tendency ruins the absurdness of your message. how do you like this poem if it is mine and you cant hear it
I want to know because my ear is to near it
and disassemble my body I fear it
and if I can my eye will tear it
is full of romance
and understands trance
and your second glance
and begs your chance
but if I need to be more clear
this is my fear
so I kept it till the rear

A few little changes, and long sentence tendency ruins the absurdness of your message.

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