This is a Petrachan sonnet that I wrote and I want to know what I should change around. The Rhyme Scheme of a Petrachan Sonnet is ABBA ABBA CDE CDE (or CDCDCD but I used CDE CDE) Each line must consist of 10 syllables.

I lost you and I hurt everyday
And this is the reason my heart is sore.
Now I regret acting like such a bore.
I cannot believe he took you away.

This is all true, though it may seem cliché
But I could not help feeling insecure.
I feared you might not like me anymore.
I cannot perceive why I am this way.

I did anything to show you romance
And I certainly showed it all to you
Why could you take it from him and not me?

I even asked you for a second chance
But you just turned me down for someone new
And you just lied thinking I would not see.

I honestly don’t want to change the meaning of the poem because this is really how I feel about my "situation" of my girlfriend dumping me for somebody else and etc. etc. but thats a whole other story.
Like I said before I don’t want to change the meaning of the poem maybe just switch or change some words to make it a little more proper. Don’t be too easy on me just give an honest opinion on what to change. And the teacher said we could use words like every and ue them as two syllables or three, whatever we wanted, and I used it here as three.


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