I wrote a new poem – what do you think?
FOOTPRINTS IN CEMENT
I.
Some say that love is
a two way street,
two to tango,
chaste-white sheets,
stay-in-one-place-
fidelity,
his and hers bathrobes,
names carved on a tree,
honeymoons and valentines
and "we always agree",
here-at-eight, dinner out,
romantic walks by the sea.
II.
"Realistically, love is sacrifice,
commitment, compromise,
accepting flaws, second chances,
third tries,
sharing the washing up,
taking it in turns to hush the baby
when it cries,
all this nonsense about romance
and these garish paper hearts
are media propaganda
and Hollywood lies."
III.
Half of all marriages
end in divorce,
it looks like love
is weak, people never stay.
Singleness is the logical
recourse,
we keep away.
IV.
(I am not one to argue,
so I whispered my dissent;
love to me always just felt the same as
leaving footprints in cement)
Candid_carnage – thanks for the star 
to clarify – I don’t really think so low of love! I was voicing alternative opinions, mine is the last (IV)
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That your unhappy verses on the invirtues of love and togetherness are eloquent doesn’t make them any less unjust! I suppose I’m saying that while its message doesn’t ring true to me, the quality of the poem itself is very good.
A star for you, cap’n.
Addition: "To clarify – I don’t really think so low of love! I was voicing alternative opinions, mine is the last (IV)"
Ahhh, I see!
I initially read it as one person going through these phases in response to unwritten experiences; beginning with hope and optimism, and ending somewhere quite a bit darker.
i love it. its true and very…thoughtful and wispy and graceful…
Loved it. the cement metaphor is great
Its beautiful
What bout mine??
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I like it. It’s good, but I always like the poems that rhyme!
You certainly know about the pains and joys of love, my sister. As a pastor, I particularly appreciate the second and third stanzas. I am very impressed with this poem! I look forward to seeing more.
Pastor John