What do you think of my poem/song lyrics?
The truth is a beautiful thing
Despite the pain that it can bring
For you have to know what is real
Before you have the chance to heal
Or you’ll always second guess
If the answer’s no or yes
It was always absurd
But you never said a word
So I thought I had a chance
With you and romance
Why didn’t you say
There was no way?
So, thank you for the broken heart
You could have stopped it from the start
The only gift you ever gave me
Because you could never see
The world through my eyes
So thank you for the lies
I’ve got to move on
Make these feelings be gone
But it’s so hard to be mad at your eyes
Gorgeous and blue as the skies
I know my dreams can’t come true
But why do I still dream of you?
You shattered my heart in a million pieces
Oh and the pain only increases
Now each day, I have to hide
All my feelings deep inside
To make sure that you can’t see
Just what you did to me
So, thank you for the broken heart
You could have stopped it from the start
The only gift you ever gave me
Because you could never see
The world through my eyes
So thank you for the lies
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It’s a pleasure to read; lovely poem yet sad because the speaker’s heart is broken so coldly. I love the rhyme scheme and the flow of your verse.
Simply beautiful. Outstanding!
its amazing i love it
Wow very deep i like it alot, good job keep up your work. Its very nice.
It’s beautiful! I really like the chorus (3rd and 6th paragraph), it is very deep. Also, I love the 4th paragraph! It is truly amazing! You should be a songwriter
Awesome!!!!!
your poem is very nice but…you write it AABBCC those are the lines you use when you rhyme now that’s very traditional but it looks and often sounds better to change it up a bit like AABCCB so for instance the last verse could be "So, thank you for the broken heart
You could have stopped it from the start
The only gift you ever gave me
The world through my eyes
So thank you for the lies
Because you could never see"
granted that doesn’t make sense as is but looking at the rhyme it seems more serious also your word choice needs a bit of help you sound like a love sick teenage girl and while you might be that just doesn’t sound very professional i like the overall idea but you should really try and find an english major or teacher to help you also sometimes big words sre good other times there not so try and find the places to use and not use them im sorry to sound so mean but i think with some editing it could be really good
w0w…..!!!XD it’s the greatest poem ever!!! it happened to me once except that i dumped him and i kinda feel bad…