What do you think of the plot of my story?
What do you think of this plot for the first book of my series? Would you read something like this?
Segolene is a redhead fairy (someone who can read minds and has visions of the future) who has washed up on the shores of Utope-the legendary island of the nymphs. No one has entered this island before, and Seg’s entry opens the barriers, making it accesible to anyone.
Seg goes to Puddlefoot, a school of magic, with her nymph friend Cidia (if you’re worried about Puddlefoot being too similar to Hogwarts, it’s not–it’s more selective since there are 6 students per class and they accept all kinds of magical creatures not just fairies. Also, it’s not a boarding school). While there, Cidia gets a letter from a nymph friend saying that Mala, a nymph emprisonned for murder, has escaped. On her wall were written the omnious words: "You will hear of me again".
Later, fairyland declares war on Utope at Mala’s suggestion. Mala says that Utope is a threat, but she really just wants to become queen. At the end of the book, Fairyland wins the war and Mala crowns herself queen–something no one was expecting. She returns the government back to a middle-ages system, with social classes and stuff.
The book is about the war and how Seg is torn between Fairyland and Utope. Her family is also torn apart by Mala– Seg’s mom wants to join her, but her Dad thinks her aims are wrong.
there are also a lot of conflicts in school, teen drama kind of things.
so what do you think? would you read a book like this?
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Personally — would I read a book like this? No.
I’m not a big fan of.. "fairies."
I still think Puddlefoot is could be POTENTIALLY similar to Hogwarts.
I know; there’s no law against creating a magical school in your book. However, watch yourself. Don’t let yourself start [self-consciously] imitating Hogwarts. You’re probably thinking, "what? Of course I won’t." but it is possible. Try to keep it as different as you can.
I don’t know. It just sounds so happy and .. is this going to be a childrens book? Fairyland sounded rather.. childish. I’m not trying to be mean, I’m being honest.
"..conflicts in school, teen drama kind of things."
This is becoming a very cliche subplot/topic. Maybe I’m all by myself here, but I have to put up with enough school drama as it is in my own life. I really don’t like reading about "teen dramas" about other situations on top of my own problems.. with a few exceptions for some actually good books I’ve found int he past. I mean, teen drama is just so.. pointless. It’s silly. None of it even matters. It’s petty.
You’re probably mad. Sorry I couldn’t tell you what you wanted to hear. If you want to write it, go for it. Why do you consult Yahoo before starting your story? Just write. Who cares what strangers like me think?
edit: I agree with Ocean. I kept thinking — "hey, that was in Harry Potter!" too.
It has too many Harry Potter influences. It consumes the writing.
i really like it!!
it seems rlly interesting! i wanna read it. :]
i dont think its like harry ptter at all…
hurry up and get it published!!!!
It’s a little confusing but it does sound creative and if you really want to write the book, go for it! If your a good enough writer, people will read anything. One of the best stories I’ve ever read had to do with a girl and her grandpa eating eggs together (course it was a short story).
If ya really want to write it….do it!
Good luck =)